Freewrite

In my formal response to Edmundson's I am going to try and write with the graing and stick with it throughout the response. In my response, I will make sure it is not as "jumpy" as Edmunson did in his essay because, to me, if something is like that then, there will be confusion because the response/essay will have no flow. It is much easier for the reader to follow the response/essay if it flows; going from one idea to the next smoothly. Unfortunately in Edmundson's essay there wasn't really any smooth transitions in his essay and I will make that a top priority in my response; that it flows from one idea to the next.
I will use quotations within my response so it can be more powerful and my point will be more obvious as I am writing the response. I will most likely use some of my points from my last blog but go into deeper depth with them. I would also like to go into depth with the logos, pathos and ethos that are mentioned, or hinted to, throughout his essay and make them some kind of points in my response.
Some of the points that I would like to talk about are:
-about the money, especially now that Congress didn't pass the bill.
-about how students don't really notice the education they are learning but other things like: other students, food, parties, ect.
-how students should get to pick the classes they want to go with their major and have any they have to take.
-how teachers and students should keep their class interesting, so students don't dread going to it or fall asleep in class
These will be some of the topics I would like to talk about in my response. These will probably be my biggest points that I hit on in my response.

If anyone has any really good tips for writing a really good response/summary please feel free to comment on this blog with them.